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2010-10-26 [Akayume]: mine loosely fits. Eternal and standing? I say it fits...
2010-10-26 [windowframe]: How else can you say 'eternal' other than with three syllables? O_o
2010-10-26 [NorthStorm]: Akayume, I like your Haiku.
2010-10-26 [wicked fae mage]: No clue, Silver... *points to my Haiku*
2010-10-26 [Akayume]: I don't know [windowframe]. DX
And thank you [NorthStorm]. (:
2010-10-26 [Chimes]: [9jlriexqk,ktpk]: You're still using too many syllables for it to count as a haiku. Perhaps, look on http://diction
[July 47]: You need another syllable in the first line to make yours a Haiku. :)
[NorthStorm]: I'm not sure your haiku fits the theme of Time.
2010-10-26 [9jlriexqk,ktpk]: Okay, I'll rework it soon :/
2010-10-26 [Chimes]: Haikus are really challenging, so don't feel too disheartened. :)
2010-10-26 [Akayume]: They are indeed. >.<''
2010-10-26 [9jlriexqk,ktpk]: I'm pretty bad for following formats :)
2010-10-26 [Aradon Templar]: It gets even harder when you consider the traditional practice of natural themes and vivid imagery rather than concrete ideas. I'm a very wordy person, I've been told, and don't like condensing phrases for fear that people will misunderstand. However, that's the elegance of the Haiku. Your goal is to communicate imagery convicingly with just a few choice words. Still working on the third line of mine. Will post when it's finished.
2010-10-27 [windowframe]: I want to steal the apostrophe from the first line of [ScottJo]'s entry, and add it to the second line of [9jlriexqk,ktpk]' entry. <_<
2010-10-27 [9jlriexqk,ktpk]: Argh! Stop picking on me!!
2010-10-27 [windowframe]: I pick on you by trying to help you! I am so cruel like that. O.o
2010-10-27 [Flisky]: Yes, Silvie. You are a cruel, mean person. ^_^
2010-10-27 [NorthStorm]: Perhaps.. but doesn't it? NOW is an instant within time, all too often ignored as we concern ourselves with the past and future. Basically, what I was going for is to stress the urgency of The Present. However, if you like, I can retract My entry. It was fun, either way.
2010-10-27 [July 47]: is that good?
2010-10-27 [Aradon Templar]: Looks good to me, ZeoOfFire.
2010-10-28 [ZeoOfFire]: woop woop
2010-11-12 [wicked fae mage]: [NorthStorm], you would love metaphysics. Especially the writings of Bergeson. (I believe I spelled his name correctly)--he is very into the present and how to interpret seconds and short instances of time.
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